Song i've written

[crazychick10793]

i'm not sure if this is the right section to post this, but i have always had a love of music, and i recently successfully finished writing my first song. i'd like some honest opinons here, if it sucks. just tell me, again it's my first song so i don't expect it to be amazing. any other music people out there, feel free to post your songs here too!

this song i imagined having a country tune

The last tear hits the pillow
as I finally fall asleep
dreaming about how close we used to be
i bet your life is better
without me
but still
i cry myself to sleep

i hope you know
that every tear stain
on my pillow is for you
for the friendship that once was
for the love that was true
i hope you know
regrets are more than painful
i lost the only one who understands
who i am
who i am

you say you're just a person,
but to me thats not the truth
i died inside
i felt my life was over
the moment that you left it
i lost my will to live

i hope you know
that every tear stain
on my pillow is for you
for the friendship that once was
for the love that was true
i hope you know
regrets are more than painful
i lost the only one who understands
who i am
who i am

some days i look
back into our friendship
back to when you said
you'd love me
no matter what mistakes i made
what happened to
that promise that you made me?
that our friendship would never fade away.

now i know
i bet your life is better without me
but still
i cry myself to sleep
living with regret this big
is harder than it seems
now i know
i can't go back in time
i can't prevent that fight
but i'd do anything
to make it up to you

i hope you know
that every tear stain
on my pillow is for you
for the friendship that once was
for the love that was true
i hope you know
regrets are more than painful
i lost the only one who understands
who i am
who i am

 

[Endless]

I like it!!! It is really beautiful.

If you record it, will you post it or give us a link?

 

[crazychick10793]

I like it!!! It is really beautiful.

If you record it, will you post it or give us a link?

if course! i don't have a guitar to do the background music yet though.

 

[Crystal11]

I am a composer of 20 years now, along with my twin sis.
Go to youtube and type in the name MsMotif6. There are some videos that are more modern but some are rock styles- more soulful. Take a listen and if you like it or have an idea of what you want, maybe you can give a detailed description of a background style.. Maybe together we can get the song put together. Never know what it can sound like.

I like your lyrics and it is awesome to be able to compose a song. Great job.

I'm in the studio everyday and basically live in it- everything is in my room LOL
We have almost 10 keyboards/synths, a cello and elec. guitar and hammared dulcimer. So its a lot of fun..

Awesome work.
Take care, Crystal

 

[Rae1889]

Yup and If you need a guitarist just ask. I'm always here.

Also. If you have garageband on a Mac its great starter point